IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 5
IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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| Task response | 5.0 |
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Question
Cultural tourism is celebrated for its economic benefits and educational value, yet it is also criticized for potentially harming the cultures it aims to showcase.
Do you agree or disagree that cultural tourism does more harm than good?
#Culture
#Agree / Disagree
Submitted Answer
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Words:206
Paragraphs:5
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Thesis Statement
culture
acquires benefits for economics and educational value. In my perspective, cultural destination is a top demand for visitors and it will easily append foreign exchange. I agree with this topic, but on the other hand, if they can not
keep the authenticity will be lost and ruin their culture
firstly, as
a tourist diverse
cultures
in every country are so interesting and even
every country or province has ethnic, such as in Bali
they have lot of
traditional food, dance and even
costume. They kept it as a culture
for the Balinese. not
only for their lifestyle
even
they adapted as a show for foreigners as an income for Bali and even
their Country which is Indonesia.Missing Linking Devices
culture
it can be a threat, so it will become challenging for those who want to keep it for their life.The way to still maintain cultural authenticity is disposing of the law to avoid people who act arbitrarily.
To summarize, I believe that cultural tourism is an outstanding aim to showcase and give a huge impact for income and education.
but
they must be careful of potentially harming and miss
the cultures
.