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The essay addresses the question but lacks coherence and has numerous grammatical errors. Vocabulary usage is adequate but could be more varied and precise. The essay could benefit from better organization and clearer thesis statement.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 53 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 28 | |
| Lexical resource | 16 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 5 |
Question
Advancements in technology have transformed various aspects of sports, from performance analysis to equipment design.
How has technology influenced sports, and does it affect the fairness of competitions?
#Sport
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Thesis Statement
technology
has influenced sports in many ways. Technology
plays a big part in advancement of of
sport. with
technology
a
lot
of improvements
has
been applied to sports.sport has experienced
a
lot
of improvements
in their system, fairness, and in their performance
analysis. if
we talk about 50 decades from now, there was
not a proper analytics tools to measure their athelete
performances
, there wes
still using conventional tools back in the day. however
, these days
sports are using more advanced tools in order to know how good their atheletes
is
. there are a lot
of devices that commonly atheletes
are using to watch their performance
, for instances
, Garmin. Garmin is a smartwatch that focusing on people
sport
performances
. it
has accurate heartrate
, Vo2max, sleep quality and many more.in modern football, FIFA is more aware of
advancement
of technology
to reducing
unfairness in every game. one
of a way that FIFA has applied to football game
these days is VAR (Virtual Assist Referee). VAR are helping
a refferees
all over the world to choose the right decision if there is a foul in a football game, it has a lot
of cameras, sensors, and playback videos. furthermore
, it is reducing unfairness of refferees
and it taking
a big part of
fairness in competitionoverall,
technology
has helped and influenced sports with
positive ways. it
obviously reduing
of unfairness in sport
competiton
because of technology
.