IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5.5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5.5
5.5
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The essay addresses the task but contains numerous grammatical errors and lacks coherence in some parts. Vocabulary usage is adequate but could be more varied, and the essay would benefit from a clearer thesis statement and better logical flow.
| Overall score | 5.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 58 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 31 | |
| Lexical resource | 18 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
As technology advances, it brings about numerous benefits such as improved efficiency and new capabilities. However, the environmental impact of increased electronic waste and resource consumption is a growing concern.
Discuss the advantages and environmental disadvantages of technological advancement.
#Technology
#Discussion
Submitted Answer
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Words:332
Paragraphs:4
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Thesis Statement
tenology
a debate has been brough
up that if digital advancements outweigh its corresponding disadvantages. Lithium battery wastes
which
is now one of the concerns of environmentalists, is among the problematic features of technology. The pros and cons of technology will be discussed in more detail in this essey
along side
with its effect on environment examples.Progress in
technological
world have
helped us human
to improve in myriad areas
such
as
, decreasing errors in statistical gathered data, information accessability
in
global
scale and eady
and fast connection despite of
its disctance
. Correspondigly
this progression has cause
a significant and tangible effect on how we socialise, study and work. to
set an example, we no longer need to travel across the globe to participate in a particular meeting and
instead we can arrange a meeting using apps such
Skype or GOOGLE meet.Having said that, Technology is not free of downsides. In recent decades,
pollutions
of any kind have
become discussion
's points
in global seminars. One of controversial issues mentioned are regarding waste in Technology. For instnace
, it have
been said that hundreds of tons of Lithium batteries have been let go in environment
which can negatively mark the sorounding
soil and living inhabitat
in that area. Futhuremore
, great
deal of energy has been utilized regarding the production of materials which are needed in Technologies such
as
mobile phone
, automobile
and medical machines. If this trends
carries on, as a result, more and more greenhouse gases such
as
carbon dioxide gases would be exhaused
to air. Moreover
due to the airborne, air quality not only locally but also globally would decrease.In conclusion,
despite of
advantages of Technology such
as
enhancement in medical devices, tons of dangerous materials are released to
habitats
of numerous animals and would eventually, negatively affect both the environments and its inhabitat
. Furthuremore
, the production of material needed needs
energy
which concretely increase
the environmental footprint by exhaustion of toxic chemical
and gases.