IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6
IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
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The essay addresses the task well, discussing both benefits and drawbacks of urbanization. However, it contains grammatical errors and lacks coherence in some parts. Vocabulary usage is adequate but could be more varied.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 32 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 16 | |
| Lexical resource | 9 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Urbanization is a trend observed worldwide, characterized by an increasing population moving to cities. This shift offers potential benefits such as improved infrastructure and greater employment opportunities but also poses significant challenges like overpopulation and pollution.
Discuss both the benefits and drawbacks of urbanization.
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Thesis Statement
increasing
numbers of cities
in the world and the former metropolits
has
expanded it area to the countryside in the past 20 years. Due to the outbreak of city
numbers and its area expansion, growing numbers of citizens are now becoming new habitants in city
, who brings
new opportunities for city
to develop itself and problems that need to be solved. In this essay, I would discuss the advantages and disadvantages of urbanization
.On the one hand,
urbanization
has a positive influence on various aspects of modern society. economically
, urbanization
brings more job opportunities for people
which increases
their income. So the citizens would be more willing to consume and invest in their lives
. In this process, the cities
have also built sufficient places for people
to satisfy their entertainment needs, their aesthetic desires and educational needs, which do not only increases
people
'
living qualoities
but also serves
as the motivator for economic development.However,
urbanization
has caused some negative impact
in
people
's lives
and society. Due to the increasing
population density in the city
, people
's living spaces in cities
are shrinking with the development of urbanization
. For example, in some metropolis in China, the prices of properties in the city
centre has
become too expensive for common people
to purchase. This phenomenon lowers people
's sense of happiness in life
and
they may feel discouraged to live
in the city
. Furthermore, traffic congestion is another problem in big modern cities
. In peak hours, citizens in the cities
are likely to be stuffed in the mainroad
and
they might be late for their important appointment.In general, the process of
urbanization
brings benefits and inconvenience to people
's lives
in the meantime. Through urbanization
, the economy of a city
and a country would be boosted and people
's status of income would be enhanced. However, compressed living space, traffic congestion and other problems in urbanization
should not be overlooked.