IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5

IELTS Essay Sample Band 5

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The essay addresses the question but lacks depth and clarity in its arguments. Grammar and vocabulary usage are basic, and coherence and cohesion need improvement for better readability.

Overall score5.0
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Lexical resource5.0
Coherence & cohesion5.0
Task response5.0
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Grammatical range and accuracy10
Lexical resource7
Coherence & cohesion4
Task response5
Question
While globalisation is often credited with boosting economic growth, it has also been criticized for its impact on small businesses and local cultures.
Discuss how globalisation contributes to economic growth and what impacts it has on local businesses and cultures.
#Globalisation
#Discussion
Submitted Answer
English:UK English
Words:162
Paragraphs:3
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Thesis Statement
While globalisation has its good impact on economic growth, the impacts it has on
local
business
and
cultures
cannot be simply
overshaded
. It becomes a concern how
local
business
and
cultures
need to be counted when we talk about globalisation. Not only it becomes individuals matter, it should
be also
highlighted by the
government
.
Government
needs to focus on finding ways for
local
business
and
cultures
to strive amidst this modern globalisation. One of the
idea
that comes to my head is that
government
should provide
trainings
for
local
business
. The second thing that can be highlighted is to promote more
local
business
and
cultures
so that it will not be faded by the fast growth of economic of globalisation.
In conclusion, I do propose two suggestions on how to help
local
business
and
cultures
to strive in the fast growth economic in this globalisation: 1).
Government
providing training programs for
local
business
and
cultures
2). Promoting
local
business
and
cultures
more.