IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 5
IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay presents a clear opinion but suffers from numerous grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, affecting readability. Ideas are not fully developed, and the essay lacks coherence and cohesion, with limited use of linking devices and unclear progression of ideas.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 25 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6 | |
| Lexical resource | 11 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Globalisation contributes to improved health outcomes globally through the sharing of medical advancements and public health strategies. Conversely, increased travel and trade also facilitate the spread of infectious diseases across borders.
Do you agree or disagree that globalisation has a more positive impact on global health than negative?
#Globalisation
#Agree / Disagree
Submitted Answer
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Words:281
Paragraphs:4
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Thesis Statement
yeilds
many possitive
health outcomes internationally, both mentally and physically, due to medical advancements and public health strategies is the topic of interrests
. Whereas the globalisation leads to several health benefits across nations, the number of contagious diseases
also increased due to tourism and trading. This essay believes that the globalisation is consequantial
in terms of medical benefits regardless the spread of infection and provides potantial
reasons to support this perspective.On one hand, the globalisation provides some negative health effects in terms of
diseases
. It is undoubtedly that the viral pandemic—COVID-19— is the catastrophic for every species
not only humans in this modern world. There are multiple factors that contribute to the the
spread of COVID-19. First, a rising in social contacts, resulting from transportation convenience, increase infectious diseases
. Moreover, overseas connections can also carry domesticate diseases
to other countries. Last but not least, economics activities across borders can potentially lead to the infection. That is, people can be infected when they touch some products that imported from forieng
countries.On the other hand,
possitive
aspects of globalisation outweigh negative outcomes. While many pandemics are owing to developments of the world, most of them are not uncurable. To elaborate, COVID-19 can be cured by personal health care, cooperation across nations, and technology advancements, which are thanks to the globalisation. Furthermore, developments in certain realms can enhance individauls
'
well-being after pandemic. Hance
, no matter how harsh the diseases
are, the world can overcome it eventually.Missing Linking Devices
insist
that the globalisation is a crucial weapons
for humans to curb any crisis that we are facing.