IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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| Overall score | 5.0 | |
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| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 19 | |
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| Lexical resource | 8 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 5 |
Question
Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that video games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them.
In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?
#Entertainment
#Advantage / Disadvantage
Submitted Answer
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Words:158
Paragraphs:4
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Thesis Statement
Video
games
are popular among all age group
of people
. Now, more children are seen playing
games
on a phone or laptop. While some people
think that video
games
are useful for learning, they also leave a negative impact on people
.Puzzle-solving is one of the educational
video
games
that is interactive and beneficial for children to play
with. Such game
helps to boost their creativity and cognitive skills. As we agree that video
games
are useful, it can also harm people
.One negative impact that
video
games
have is that it may lead to a loss of the desire to play
other activities. It can also affect one's eyesight as they have too much screentime
from playing
the games
.In conclusion, I feel that having drawbacks of
video
games
depends on the individual. We should be more responsibile
and have a balance of video
and physical games
so as to prevent it from affecting us.