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IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the task but lacks clear structure and coherence, with several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Vocabulary is limited and repetitive, and the essay would benefit from more examples and a clearer thesis statement.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 39 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 17 | |
| Lexical resource | 14 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Writing Task
#Urbanization
#Discussion
Urban areas often offer better healthcare facilities and services, which can lead to improved health outcomes. However, urban environments can also pose unique health challenges due to factors like pollution and lifestyle.
Discuss the health benefits and challenges of living in urban areas.
Submitted Answer
Words257|Paragraphs4
English:
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Paragraph 1 Issues:
Thesis Statement
for
the residents who are living in the urban
area
are
important, because
it is an issue that it is discussed daily nowadays by people in both private and public sectors. I would like to discuss both the pros and cons of living in urban
area
.It is widely accepted by most that due to the
fiscial
commitement
made by the goverment
during election
, the hospital in urban
area
can received
most amount of the resources, such as medicines
, well trained
doctors and professional equipments
. Which means the citizens in urban
area
can have a better medical sercives
with the sufficient amount of health care than rural
area
.However, many researchers maintain that the mental health of
urban
residents are
influence
by the hectic and fast-paced life style
; thereby, in recent times we have witnessed an increasing trend of different mental illness
occured
in city
. To make one final point, it has been suggested by the leading researchers that the sound and air pollution bring
by the vehicles are one of the most important factor
of the cancers.To make one final point, the
boundries
between the rural
and urban
area
are less obvious than ever. I believe as the technology improve, the difference between the
urban
and
rural
area
will be eliminated, that is to say,
rural
area
will be able to get equal amount of resources to the
urban
area
,
converserly
,
urban
area
is likely to
purifiy
the air and sound pollution by using a clean hi-tech transportation.