IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5.5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5.5
5.5
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The essay addresses the question but lacks coherence and cohesion. Grammar and vocabulary usage are basic with several errors. More structured development of ideas and better use of linking words are needed.
| Overall score | 5.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 33 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 12 | |
| Lexical resource | 14 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Some developed countries now have unemployment problems.
Why do people still want to immigrate to these countries? Give reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.
#Globalisation
#Direct Question
Submitted Answer
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Thesis Statement
many
industrialised nations too, but still many
want to travel
foreign
countries . Having different purposes behind travelling
will be explored in the upcoming paragraphs.First of all, study is
the one of
the biggest reason
for immigration. Today's generations have numerous choices for education. Some donot
find
the particular course in their nation they further want to continue. So they find
the specific university and region via internet
which suits them. Additionally, individuals fond of exploring new
places
becomes a main attraction for travelling
which sometimes helps them to settle their only. For example, better facilities and lifestyle of developed nations as compared to one's own hometown are reasons
for immigrating.In addition to, some people exhausted for living same
place
for doing and repeating specific tasks on a regular basis for many
years
leads them to find
new
place
, new
job and a new
life. Airways makes it easy to travel
any
place
by follwing
rules
and regulations of destiny country. Before concluding, shooting movies is very
trending nowadays leaving one's own country. More variety and complexity of films hikes numbers of individuals in cinemas and online sources subscription. Last, but not least
reason
is business. In this industralized
world, goods and services can be provided from any corner having internet
facility. It's
not a big deal to spread your business from one to many
areas of the globe.To wrap up,
finding
better opportunities all around the world in every field are the reasons
for moving from one place
to another at internatonal
level.