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Writing Task

#Food

#Advantage / Disadvantage

Traditional diets are based on long-established eating habits and cultural practices, which are sometimes thought to be healthier or more sustainable.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of adhering to traditional diets in the modern world.

Submitted Answer

Words174|Paragraphs4

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Paragraph 1 Issues:

Thesis Statement

Traditional

diets

scientifically proven as a more beneficial and provable method when it comes to eating

habit

and cultural practices.

Paragraph 2 Issues:

Missing Linking Devices

In a study published in 2011 by students from New York University,

it's

concluded that

traditional

diets

are safe for those who suffering stomach problems and able to reduce 15% weight within 2 weeks for those who are under group age of 17 - 50 years old.

The method would limit the sample to only

eat

two times

/day and the food is consisting of 80% protein and 20% carbohydrate.

Although

traditional

diets

offered subtle benefits, it was not suitable the elders. As people are aging, their metabolism is getting slower. Eating

high protein

food would cause few digestive system issues such as bloated or constipation. The study involved 20 people who fall under 50 years and above, and out of 20, 8 persons suffered from constipation and bloated.

Despite the downside,

traditional

diets

in general are indeed

an established practices

which its benefits would trade off the drawback it has to offer.