IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 7

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The essay effectively addresses the impact of tourism on local cultures and suggests measures for sustainable cultural tourism. However, it could benefit from more specific examples and a clearer thesis statement to enhance coherence and task achievement.

Overall score	7.0
Grammatical range and accuracy	7.0
Lexical resource	6.0
Coherence & cohesion	7.0
Task response	7.0

Writing Task

#Culture

#Direct Question

Tourism can have a significant impact on local cultures, sometimes altering them in irreversible ways. Ensuring that cultural tourism is sustainable is a challenge many communities face.

How does tourism affect local cultures, and how can cultural tourism be made sustainable?

Submitted Answer

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Thesis Statement

Tourism

is able to bring several opportunities to a country's economy, but can also contribute significant problems to local

communities

if not

regulated

. That said, it is important to understand how over-

tourism

can lead to

many

irreversible effects if the designated government units do not implement the necessary measures to counter this. To do so,

let's

dissect how local

tourism

impacts

cultures

Local

tourism

allows visitors the opportunity to learn about ethnic

communities

and their

culture

, but if not

regulated

properly, can lead to overcrowded heritage sites and eventually, destroyed homes or establishments. If crowds are not properly managed, people are more likely to litter, car traffic increases,

and

as a result, fosters pollution of

many

forms. This calls the need to establish rules aimed at

regulating

the rapidly rising

tourism

in these areas.

In order for these

cultures

to preserve their sanctity, the necessary ordinances should be established by the designated governing bodies to

regulate

the amount of people who visit these areas. This means that foreigners should be willing to pay extra to experience certain attractions or visit specific locations

that

otherwise, would be free or cost less for locals. Doing so does not totally eliminate the possibility of tourists visiting, but

can

in some way, manage the crowds that are quick to accumulate without these measures.

In short, tourists should be willing to

pay

at least, a small price for inconveniencing the lives of other people and in some ways, disrupting their homes.

Tourism

is a tool that cultivates growth for individuals and

communities

alike, but like

many

things in life, too much of something can be destructive. That is why

regulating

the number of tourists at a time is instrumental for keeping

many

communities

and

cultures

alive.

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Total Errors	19
Grammatical range and accuracy	5
Lexical resource	7
Coherence & cohesion	3
Task response	4