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IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the task but lacks depth in idea development and examples. Grammar and vocabulary need improvement for better clarity and coherence.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 28 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6 | |
| Lexical resource | 11 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6 | |
| Task response | 5 |
Question
International tourism has become a vital part of the global economy, contributing to economic growth in many countries. However, it also raises concerns regarding environmental degradation and cultural dilution.
Discuss the benefits and drawbacks of international tourism.
#Tourism
#Discussion
Submitted Answer
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Words:169
Paragraphs:4
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Thesis Statement
very important
for people.We will talk about economy increase, on the one hand getting tourists to
country
inevitably leads to economical
growth, because of raise
of demand on hotels, products, real estate, cars, taxi, and business growth. Furthermore, it gives people workplaces
it is very good
for country
's economy. Country
gets richer because of bigger amount of money circle in the country
. Moreover, it attracts lucrative investors who increasing
small business and also big deals.On the other hand, it brings increase prices of products
and
it is bad for citizens who do not work with tourists, although investors can build facilities which can harm environment and get unsatisfaction of citizens who fight for environmental care.
Additionoly
, cultural conflicts can occure
and can lead to misunderstandings between citizens and tourists.Missing Linking Devices
concusion
, we can see both advantages and disadvantages of international tourism, but althought
we can not
ban tourism we can only search for solutions.