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IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5

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The essay presents a clear opinion but lacks coherence and cohesion, with ideas not fully developed or logically organized. Grammar and vocabulary usage are basic, with several errors affecting clarity and formality is inconsistent.
Overall score5.0
Grammatical range and accuracy5.0
Lexical resource5.0
Coherence & cohesion5.0
Task response5.0
Total Errors40
Grammatical range and accuracy16
Lexical resource15
Coherence & cohesion5
Task response4
Question
Space exploration inspires countless individuals and leads to technological breakthroughs. Nevertheless, many believe that we should focus more on solving economic and social issues on Earth before investing in space.
Do you agree or disagree that solving Earth's problems should come before investing in space exploration?
#Space Exploration
#Agree / Disagree
Submitted Answer
English:US English
Words:277
Paragraphs:4
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Thesis Statement
These days, the study of
space
exploration must be important for
Governments
to
invest
more, but
i
prefer that The
Governments
must pay
more
attention to
earth
problems
. I strongly agree with this notion
To begin with, there are
many
people
on
every country must deal with
problem
that based on economic and social
issue
that The
Governments
must pay attention to. Firstly, in every country
such as
Australia,
many
people
keep struggling with their live finance, due to high living
costs
and
people
not get pay enough. It will be better if the
government
can help increase the salary for employees. Last but not least, social issues on these days
such as
healthcare unavailability there are still
many
region
which
can not
provide healthcare facilities. As the
result
many
people
who infected by disease
can not
get medical aid.
However, on these days the
Governments
must focus on how to improve their society and solving the
problems
that keep increasing every year. Apart from that,
investing
on
space
exploration is also important because of this,
people
will gain
more
knowledge and can be aware if
there
any disaster that came from
space
to
earth
. Finally, it can improve the technology to become more efficient that can provide the
space
explorer to give
more
benefit. For example, by using satellite,
space
explorer
can predict what will happen to the
earth
such as
storm predict
and
they can see
more
about something that can
affect
for
earth
.
In conclusion,
eventhough
studying about
space
is important,
i
would rather
said
that the
government
must
invest
more and get focus
to
solving the
problems
in society before
investing
in
space

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