IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the topic but lacks clarity and coherence. Grammar and vocabulary usage are basic, with several errors affecting readability. The task response is not fully developed, and the essay does not clearly weigh the advantages and disadvantages of the trend discussed.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 24 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4 | |
| Lexical resource | 12 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Differences between countries become less evident each year. Nowadays, all over the world people share the same fashions, advertising, brands, eating habits and TV channels.
Do the disadvantages of this trend outweigh the advantages?
#Culture
#Advantage / Disadvantage
Submitted Answer
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Words:261
Paragraphs:4
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Thesis Statement
products
by advertising in creative ways. While it is a commonly held belief that the product
looks new
as the advertisement
develops, there is also
an argument that opposes it.To begin with, the advantages of selling the
products
as a new
it can help in raising the profit as well as the customers
. In other words, the customers
will think that it’s
something helpful for them because
it’s
a new
tool. In addition, a lot of people
nowadays are interested in new
things, and also
to try a product
that’s
seen in their advertisement
as well. For example, ‘Noon’ application has been extremely increased sales in the last
5 years because
of the new
way of advertising.Another point to consider, cheating the
people
in the advertisement
as a new
can be negative. It is also
possible to say that, many people
are now experts in
buying things online and
they see the comments from other customers
for helping them know the product
. Moreover, there are also
certain disadvantages which is the company may lose their customers
by trying to create new
ideas not suitable for them. For instance, ‘SHEIN’ advertised a new
brand that is special for ladies, but unfortunately, the brand was useless because
the quality was too bad.In conclusion, despite
people
having different views, I believe that the benefits can be more especially for the business by the creation of a new
product
. Besides, developing the business
focusing on the advertisement
.