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IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the task but lacks clarity and coherence, with frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Vocabulary is limited and sometimes inaccurately used, affecting the overall readability and effectiveness of the argument.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 30 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 10 | |
| Lexical resource | 11 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Writing Task
#Entertainment
#Discussion
Many people believe that music is just a form of entertainment, whilst others believe that music has a much larger impact on society today.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Submitted Answer
Words274|Paragraphs4
English:
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Thesis Statement
because
people
do not focus on things, which they hear, whereas other people
think that music affects to
modern public, due to unpointed work of our brain. I side with those who believed in an impact
of music on our lives.Some
people
suggest that music is not an essential thing in daily life because
there are a few amounts of people
who accept audial information, such as music. There is a concept about
dividing whole
society
into four grops
according prefered
types of information. One of group (around 25%) is an 'audials
', people
, who is influnced
by audio, includes music. Therefore, music counted like an unimportant thing because
of minority of audials
.However, there is a belief, which
i
support, that music affects to
people
because
of shadow work of brain
. Thoughts, which people
can think about influence on lives, but unrecognized processes have an impact
as large as obvious ones. According scientific
research, listening to music can produce special chemicals, which can make us happy or sad, active or relaxed and be in other dufferent
moods. The role of emotions in society
is certainly important and idea
, that emotions influence on society
is very common.In conclusion, while some believe that music has not an any
impact
on
people
because
of lack of attention on hearing, I support those who think that
impact
of music is much larger than it is supposed, although there are
not
direct connection between thinking process and listening to music, the emotions, which appear as the result of music's
impact
, influence on modern
society