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IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay attempts to address the task but lacks clarity and coherence, with frequent grammatical errors affecting readability. Vocabulary is adequate but lacks precision and variety, and the development of ideas is limited with insufficient examples.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 40 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 17 | |
| Lexical resource | 14 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Writing Task
#Entertainment
#Discussion
Many people believe that music is just a form of entertainment, whilst others believe that music has a much larger impact on society today.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Submitted Answer
Words273|Paragraphs4
English:
Global Issues:
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Task Response
Readability
Coherence
Cohesion
Vocabulary Usage
Grammar Range
Ideas Development
Logical Flow
Paragraph 1 Issues:
Thesis Statement
,
because
people
do not focusing
on things
, which they hear, whereas other people
think that music affect
to modern public, due to unpointed work of our brain. I side with those who believed in an impact
of music on our lives.Some
people
suggest that music is not a very important
thing
in daily life,
because
there are a few amount
of people
who is
accept
audial information, such as music. There is a concept about dividing whole society
into four grops
according prefered
types of information. One of group (around 25%) is an audials
, people
, who is
influnced
by audio, includes music. Therefor
, music counted like an unimportant thing
, because
of minority of audials
.However, there is a belief, which
i
support, that music affect
to people
, because
of shadow
work of brain
. Things
, which people
can think about influence on lives, but unrecognized processes have an impact
as large as obvious ones. According scientific
research, listening to music can produce special chemicals, which can make us happy or sad, active or relaxed and other dufferent
moods. The role of emotions in society
is certainly important, and idea
, that emotions influence on society
is very common.In conclusion, while some believe that music has not an any
impact
on
people
,
because
of lack of attention on hearing, I support those who think that
impact
of music is much larger than it is supposed, although there are
not
direct connection between thinking process and listening to music, emotions, which appear as the result of music's
impact
, influence on modern
society