IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 6
IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
6.0
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The essay addresses the causes and solutions for students working while studying but has several grammatical errors and lacks coherence in some parts. Improved sentence structure and better organization of ideas would enhance clarity and readability.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 36 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 17 | |
| Lexical resource | 12 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Some students work while studying. This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure.
What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?
#Education
#Problem / Solution
Submitted Answer
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Thesis Statement
students
engaging in a part
-time
job while pursuing their studies. This leads negative
impacts in
student
's life in several ways. I believe This trend has many negative problems
and those can be solved in various ways.The expensive education
fee
is the main problem
for students
doing part
-time
jobs. As the tuition fees
are high
and belonging from middle class
family they won't
be able to pay their fees
. Because of the lack of the financial stablization
they will be compelled to work. On top that, They also have to look afer
their personal and household expenses. For instance, The student
from developing countries go overseas for higher
education where the education fee
are high
so they are forced to do part
-time
work. Furthermore, not only to overcome fee
problem
also to fulfill
their personal desire they engage in part
-time
work . To withstand these
problem
government has vital
role.The government universities should provide different scholarship facilities for
students
according to the student
's performance. In addition, this should also be followed in private universities. For example, If there is scholarship for higher
attendance and for good result
then
student
will engage more in studying rather than finding jobs. Moreover,This enhances the students
time
towards their studies.In conclusion, Many
students
are compelled to work because of their poor financial background
which can be solved by providing various discounts in
fees
which helps
student
to pay more attention to their studies . Furthermore, It reduces stress of work pressure for students
.