IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
5.0
Overall Score
30 Jul 24, 11:30
Want to practice?
Try this question
Overall Feedback
The essay addresses the causes and solutions but lacks clarity and coherence. Grammar and vocabulary usage need improvement, and the ideas should be more logically developed and supported with examples.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 35 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 14 | |
| Lexical resource | 13 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Some students work while studying. This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure.
What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?
#Education
#Problem / Solution
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:255
Paragraphs:4
Formality
Task Response
Readability
Coherence
Cohesion
Vocabulary Usage
Grammar Range
Ideas Development
Logical Flow
Thesis Statement
children
undertaking more pressure with their duty after school. However
, this study-disturbance has a reason that will be explained as well as the suggestion toward current issue.Childhood is time for running and laughing, dreaming and experiencing, playing and learning.
Phenomenon
of Sandwich Generation is currently happened
in this modern era. Undoubtedly, it is caused by unsufficience
of household matters. Because of olders
problem
, such as unemployment and lack of financial knowledge, children
have to help
their parents to fullfil
family's needs. Just imagine that there is a family with hard struggle of edibility, they even prefer to find for money and food rather than to bring their child
to learn at school. However
, sense of parenting attempt
to schooling
their children
, but to work too in term of
necessary things to do.The current problem need to be tackled by the aid of government and
non-govermental
organizations in order to diminish student's pressure. Actually, poors have
their rights in any code of law that will help
them, at least, to make every child
spent
their childhood freely without suffering adultery problems. It is important to emphasize these organization
for it is their responsibilities to help
them.Shortly, this working
children
issue is caused by the lack of sufficienced-need
in realm
of housing company. However
, I suggest to emphasizing
the government and private organizations to help
poors
with any fundings
regulation. It is essencial
since children
education has to be focused in term of
preparing next
generation.