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The essay addresses the question but lacks depth in exploring ethical concerns and solutions. Grammar and vocabulary need improvement, and coherence is hindered by unclear transitions and organization.

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Writing Task

#Sport

#Direct Question

Sports are not immune to ethical concerns, which can range from doping to corruption, impacting the fairness and integrity of competitions.

What are the major ethical concerns in sports today, and how should they be addressed?

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There are a lot of ethical issues in

sporting

events

such as doping and bribes, which weaken

fairness

of competitions. The main cause to create these concerns is greediness of organizations and owners. Hence,

public

and club members should take effective steps to stop

avairace

and corruptions.

It can be seen there are

many

indications of suspicious

actions

when leaders of Olimpic committees and global or regional sporing organizations

make

surprising decisions. In particular, when the committee

select

a host

country

for a major

sporting

event

, it will always lead to

public

critic and protest. For instance, the World Cup of football is the biggest

sporting

event

on earth now, but its election of host

country

brings a huge debate and

make

people to suspect potential bribes among voters of the FIFA. The last time, the

country

which held the

tourment

had

harsh

climate for athletes and supporters.

Further

this nation broke the International Ethical Practices such as worker's rights when it was preparing for the

tourment

. Unfortunately, FIFA chose this

country

as the host regardless of the

public

protest and

skeptics

To stop moral concern in sports, the society and athletes should play active roles. The society should harshly

critisize

whenever

sporting

intitutions

take suspicious

actions

. There are

many

ways of doing it. For example, journalists should effectively publicize any corrupted cases to the public. Also, the supporters and people can boycott not watching the competitions. Furthermore, finance in the institutions must be

tranparent

. Now,

many

financial

actions

many

athletic institution

are closed to the public. Therefore, the society must require these

action

to be

trasparent

. Another efficient way of preventing the corruption is the voice of athletes themselves. They have to bring their voices to

make

fairer competition and system in

sporting

. They have to protect their rights.

conclution

, there are

many

likely corrupted

events

which athletic organizations

make

on the

public

eyes. Thus, people and sport's members and players have to take efficient steps to protect fairness and trust.

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