IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 6.5

IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6.5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 6.5

6.5

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The essay addresses the task but lacks depth in discussing the relevance and drawbacks of technology in solving environmental issues. While the grammar and vocabulary are generally good, the coherence and cohesion could be improved with clearer connections between ideas.

Overall score	6.5
Grammatical range and accuracy	7.0
Lexical resource	7.0
Coherence & cohesion	6.0
Task response	6.0

Writing Task

#Environment

#Direct Question

Technology offers promising solutions to environmental issues, but there are concerns about its over-reliance.

How relevant is technology in solving environmental issues, and what are the potential drawbacks?

Submitted Answer

Words278|Paragraphs4

English:

Global Issues:

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Coherence

Cohesion

Vocabulary Usage

Grammar Range

Ideas Development

Logical Flow

Paragraph 1 Issues:

Thesis Statement

The world today is riddled with environmental problems, and many argue that

technology

is the solution to addressing them, However, some contend that

technology

is not enough and can even become a crutch for those who abuse its benefits. To thoroughly understand this subject, it is important to understand

technology

as a tool and as a potentially harmful instrument to the environment and to society.

Technology

has brought about the commoditization of social media which is instrumental in spreading awareness of important issues such as environmental degradation. Alongside this revolutionary development came the rise of electronic commerce, a game-changer for many entrepreneurs all over the world. This has lessened the need for aggressive construction of large

infrastructures

which in turn, aids the preservation of natural resources. As a result, pollution is mitigated and carbon emissions are reduced.

However, these technological advancements come at a significant cost for society if not handled with care. Research shows that in the

last

five years, individuals have spent more than four days in a week without human interaction and consider themselves lonely. This is mainly due to the convenience

technology

provides making more people feel less inclined to leave their homes thus, resulting in reduced social interaction. A byproduct of this is having less opportunity to have meaningful conversations with others, which studies have shown

lead

to stifled creativity and innovation.

With these things considered, it is important to distinguish the positive and negative effects

technology

has on individuals and society as a whole. As the popular saying goes, "Too much of a good thing is not good

anymore

", a principle that continues to apply to the responsible use of

technology

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Total Errors	14
Grammatical range and accuracy	3
Lexical resource	4
Coherence & cohesion	3
Task response	4