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IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the topic but lacks depth and clarity in its arguments. Grammar and vocabulary need improvement, and the essay should be more cohesive and coherent to achieve a higher score.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 35 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 8 | |
| Lexical resource | 16 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6 | |
| Task response | 5 |
Question
Telemedicine has been heralded for its potential to significantly alter healthcare delivery by providing medical consultation through digital means.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of telemedicine.
#Technology
#Advantage / Disadvantage
Submitted Answer
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Words:222
Paragraphs:5
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Thesis Statement
technology
shows the ability to accelerate the ways of providing services
. Which has number of
advantages than disadvantages.Technological advancement has
minimize
the time that involve in providing services
. The time angaged
to deliver a task is lesser, when using technology
than it is in manually. Accordingly, digitalized services
has brought everything to our doorstep than in-person. For instans
, during world panademic
Covid 19
period, many fields used technology
and introduced new systems to people. Specially, the health sector.
They conducted the doctor's consultation through online and delivered the presscription
through an email.Missing Linking Devices
technology
has boost
the efficiency levels of the service
providers. For an example, than
manually creating an employee personal
file, there are sytems
like Human Resources Information System to creat
them digitally. Same, use of technology
has reduce
the number of workforce angaged
in one process.Although the
services
are been
digitalized, they are under controll
of human. Which can lead to possible errors during the delivery of the services
, through such systems. These errors totally depending on the controller's mental condition and the environment that person dealing with. As an example, updating salary file under lots of presure
, can cause for numericle
errors.To conclude, although there are few disadvantages, advantages of technological advancement outweigh with the above evidence.