IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 5
IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the role of education in promoting cultural awareness but lacks depth and clarity. Grammar and vocabulary usage are basic, and the essay could benefit from better coherence and more developed ideas.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 28 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5 | |
| Lexical resource | 12 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6 | |
| Task response | 5 |
Question
Education systems have the potential to play a significant role in promoting cultural awareness and sensitivity through the integration of comprehensive cultural studies.
What is the role of education in promoting cultural awareness, and how should cultural studies be integrated into educational systems?
#Culture
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Words:220
Paragraphs:3
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Thesis Statement
education
in promoting cultural awareness is that they are
the gateway to
student from various
communities to receive and socialize with eachother
. Education
, in simple terms, school provided the students from various
different background
to enroll
and study in the same environment with students from different background
as their peers. In this light, it is important how educators should invest their time and energy in providing the necessary education
to their pupils
.Education
started
to become the standard in many parts of the world
starting
from the end of the 20th century, and people from
various
background
who seeks better living conditions elsewhere
starting
to come to places metropolitan area like the United States and first-world country.
This has created the need to intergrate
the culture and create a some sort of dialogue between the various
communities to create a some sort of harmony and peacefullness
.Missing Linking Devices
pupils
. Many schools in the United States has
started
a sort of cultural festival to gave
their mixed-background
pupils
a way to introduce their heritage and personal culture. The benefit of doing festivals like this is that the pupils
may have become accostumed
and hopefully reduced their ignorance and stigma of others around them.