IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6
IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
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The essay addresses the question and provides a balanced discussion of the advantages and disadvantages of online education. However, there are several grammatical errors and the essay could benefit from better coherence and more varied vocabulary.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 31 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 11 | |
| Lexical resource | 9 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 7 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Online education promises enhanced accessibility to education for individuals across different geographical locations.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of the accessibility provided by online education.
#Online Education
#Advantage / Disadvantage
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Thesis Statement
However
there is a mixed opinion about this, some believes this is a
maverlouse
idea for children across the globe and technology will revolutionize
education
but on the other hand, some argue that
students
need to be taught directly at school.
In my opinion, online
education
has more advantages than disadvantages.Online
education
brings great benefits to society. Firstly, it is good for children who
did
not have to condition to go to school, for example,
african
students
have to walk around
7-8
kilometers per day to have access to
education
but with information
technology
they can study right at their homes.
Secondly, learning at home means less travelling
therefore reduces toxic fumes and improves children's overall health. Thirdly, the internet has lots of online
tools that students
can use to assist their learning.However
, online
education
has some drawbacks. First of all,
students
might lose focus easily while they are learning online because the internet has a lot of temptations such as social media,
online
games, etc. Second of all,
online
education
needs
wifi
so the government has to build more network towers that dangerous and
hard
to build
and
it also costs tons of money.
Third of all, not everyone can have access to digital devices
for example, mobile phones, computers, etc.Online
education
offers educational opportunities for everyone around the globe and will change our view about education
. Although, there is
some downsides to this trend, however
I strongly believe that these disadvantages are minimal to the advantages of it.