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IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5

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28 Mar 25, 19:23
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The essay addresses the topic of e-waste but lacks depth in exploring challenges and solutions, with limited examples. Grammar and vocabulary usage are basic, and coherence is affected by unclear transitions and some awkward phrasing.
Overall score5.0
Grammatical range and accuracy5.0
Lexical resource5.0
Coherence & cohesion5.0
Task response5.0
Total Errors37
Grammatical range and accuracy8
Lexical resource17
Coherence & cohesion8
Task response4

Writing Task

#Technology
#Problem / Solution
The rapid pace of technological advancements has led to a significant increase in electronic waste, posing environmental and health risks.
What are the challenges presented by e-waste and what can be done to improve its management?

Submitted Answer

Words261|Paragraphs5
English:US English
Global Issues:
Formality
Task Response
Readability
Coherence
Cohesion
Vocabulary Usage
Grammar Range
Ideas Development
Logical Flow
Paragraph 1 Issues:
Missing Linking Devices
Thesis Statement
The rapid pace of technological advancements has led to a significant increase in electronic
waste
, posing environmental and health risks.
In the
last
10 years, the world population has been increasing, and with that, the electronic
waste
. There are many challenges presented by e- waste, such as pollution in rivers, forests,
include
cities, all these might affect our daily
live
, our health and also the future generations.
Paragraph 3 Issues:
Missing Linking Devices
Nowdays, countries like England, a world power, are
promovating
the 3 R's of 'Reduce, Reuse,Recycle' that are essential parts of
waste
hierarchy, to improve the management of e-
waste
. On February of this year, in London, the
goverment
start a
campain
with the tittle ' Less is better than excess
'
. The main purpose of this significant and innovating project is to clean the city of the excess of technology and help countries with
less
possibilities and no access to internet. They donate the old computers, desks, cellphones and whatever people have in their homes and
is
considering 'old' to countries like South Africa.
Paragraph 4 Issues:
Missing Linking Devices
In the other hand, the e-
waste
could be a big damage and
losting
of time
beacuse
all these
anticuate
articles in 10 years more might
does
n't
work or start to fail in some
fuctions
.
Paragraph 5 Issues:
Missing Linking Devices
After all
expouse
, the e-
waste
is a reality in our
lifes
, and we have to take it seriously doing actions like 'Less is better than excess' in Englad and
don't
forgetting
the 3 R's at home, work and where you go.
If we create
concience
, the future generations would be thankful.

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