IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6
IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
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The essay addresses the question but lacks clarity and coherence in some parts. Grammar and vocabulary usage are adequate but could be improved for better readability and precision.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 26 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6 | |
| Lexical resource | 10 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Some believe technology has made our lives too complex, and the solution is to lead a simpler life without technology.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
#Technology
#Agree / Disagree
Submitted Answer
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Paragraphs:5
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Thesis Statement
technology
has made
some people
use the technology
every now and then. Many
people
are now living with the growing advancement of
technology
such as
learning
new
formats and techniques with the machines or tools
and
it also
encourage
most
people
to be
up to date
to the latest trend
such as
mobile phones, computers and
gadgets
.
As a result, many people
believe that the impact of technology
has made
their
lives
complicated
and the best way to combat this is to live a life
without the use of technology
. While I agree that eliminating technology
, could be beneficial, I believe that it is not the most effective solution.Rising of
technology
may indeed give us a tough life
. Most
people
who require to use the
technology
such as
learning the
new
format of a machine in a company can
make
people
feel stress as they have to re-learn again or a
new
launched of
gadget
that has rare features that may cause
people
to impulsively buy due to peer pressures.By living a
life
without this, we can ensure that individuals who choose not to use
technology
in their
lives
will experience a simpler
life
without following the norm of other
people
.
However, this approach does not address the issue. The most comprehensive approach would be the opportunity to
make
an advantage by gaining knowledge and probably make
the workloads lesser. For instance, a company who has a new
machine, would be very beneficial to the employees as they would exert minimum efforts to complete their work.Additionally, by doing something else like finding a
new
hobby would greatly make
a positive effect in our lives
. Rather than focusing solely to
the new
gadgets
that has
been launched, people
should limit their time getting addicted to these gadgets
.In conclusion, while getting rid of
technology
may lead to a simpler life
. It is not a solution.A combination of making
an advantage of it and doing something else is necessary. Therefore, I believe that there are measures need
to consider rather than eliminating technology
in our lives
.