IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the importance of funding in public education but lacks clarity and coherence. Grammar and vocabulary usage are adequate but need improvement for better readability and cohesion.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 22 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 2 | |
| Lexical resource | 12 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Funding levels for public education vary significantly between regions, affecting the quality of education provided.
How important is funding in public education, and what effects would increased funding have?
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Words:336
Paragraphs:4
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Thesis Statement
quality
of education
is divided by the levels of funding
in one country
. The funding
levels affect the amenities and systems for advanced learning in each school, and many middle-developing countries
cannot reach a higher
quality
of education
. This essay describes how to increase
the funding
quality
, and steps that must prioritize
and maximize the cost of our educational system.Firstly, the prioritization of
funding
for higher
education
is a must. The country
with its government can make a better plan and target educators to increase
the quality
of prioritization. Not only for middle-low people
but for every disability and woman. Access to education
must be prioritized
by the geography of the landscape in each place. By that improvement, people
can easily access and increase
the quality
itself. On the other hand, we can visualize the future of the economy and the habits of our people
, including productivity and a higher
level of education
. By prioritizing
our people
, we can achieve rich kinds of jobs, skills, and products in every field. For example, Japan can be our preference as a modern country
to build higher
access to the internet astheir
priority, which was affecting the literature habits of their people
. By that, recently Asian countries
made Japan as their model of future education
.Secondly, by maximizing our
funding
in education
we can produce our needs by ourselves. The researchers and engineers can help the country
to fulfill
their quality
by research. By that, the country
can develop and push the cost for every sector because they can produce something unless imported from another country
. On the other hand, they can export their products and increase
the funding
for more advanced education
. For Example, England has so many researchers in many fields to grow their country
. They produce high
-quality
food and biotechnologies using the results of research.In conclusion,
funding
can be increased
by prioritizing
and maximizing the fields and helping education
grow faster and significantly to reach the high
quality
of education
.