IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the question but lacks clarity and coherence. Grammar and vocabulary need improvement, and the ideas should be more logically developed and supported with examples.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 40 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 12 | |
| Lexical resource | 20 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Some believe technology has made our lives too complex, and the solution is to lead a simpler life without technology.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
#Technology
#Agree / Disagree
Submitted Answer
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Words:280
Paragraphs:4
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Thesis Statement
technology
is necessary in society nowadays. Some people claim that Technology
changes human being
because
with technology
, their live are too esier
and complex when they want to find something. Other
say
that they can find the solution in their life without technology
, and It Is too simple. However, I agree that the technology
give
human benefit for education
and healthcare.To begin with, Technology is acceptable
in
citizen
expecially
for education
. In education
, students require technology
to improve their lesson
. They are able to learn more
such as math
, history and language. Students also
can be self-study and develop their imagination with the use of technology
. The development of technology
also
help teacher in school because
teacher can apply learning for their pupil that base on knowladge
in technology
that they accept in internet. For example, when students dont
understand about the lessson
that the teacher give, they will search by themselves with using google, website and also
blog.Some people believe that without
technology
, they cannot develop their life and
it is essential for heathcare
in society. Techonlogy
is required for many science
such as doctor. It is helpul
for the to detect various disease, so they are easy to choose about what kind of medichine
they will give. In hospital, with technology
, the medical tools are complex because
of the use of technology
. for
exampel
, people who will check their condition that they need medical tools which is
sopisticated
.To sum up, I believe that the development of
technology
is too crusial
for society that Technology is acceptable in citizen expecially
for education
and also
for healthcare that is more complex for human.