IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5.5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5.5
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The essay addresses the question but contains numerous grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Coherence and cohesion are moderate, with some ideas not fully developed or logically connected. Vocabulary usage is adequate but lacks variety and precision.
| Overall score | 5.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 41 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 10 | |
| Lexical resource | 22 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Space exploration has the power to inspire the next generation of scientists and engineers. Critics question if this inspirational value outweighs the tangible, practical outcomes required from such expensive projects.
Do you agree or disagree that the inspirational value of space exploration is as important as its practical outcomes?
#Space Exploration
#Agree / Disagree
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Thesis Statement
space
research
can immensely influence the future individuals
who are seeking a career oppurtunity
in technical and scientifc
aspect
of space
sciences
. While the youngsters can be motivated by insipirational
values but
the investment on each space
project
is extremely high. I am complelety
agree with the former statement that budding science
and technology student admire the inspirational content, which eventually motivate them to pursue this field of study.First and foremost, the
space
research
projects
require extreme amount of money, starting from initial development stage to the final assembly and mission commecement
stage. Although these processes takes
years of time for implementation but
it also come
with the high expenses. The students who inspire by these
space
projects
follows the complete roadmap from start
till
the end, which lead them to gain more knowledge about the technology behind the
projects
realted
to rocket and
space
science
so they start researching about the career
opputunity
, which is the
contineous
process for all next generations.
For example, the indian
space
research
organisation inspiring the young generation not only by setting space
mission like Mangalyann or Chandrayaan but also due to the astonishing low budget space
probes and rockets.Furthermore, the
goverment
should take some initiatives that could provide the students with better professional perpectives
about the space
exploration and the science
behind it. Moreover, the expensive projects
could attract future generation but
the best way to build their real interest is by opening more space
research
educational institutes where they could have access to gain the required education. The government should invest more in eduction and keep the projects
budget friendly, as hightech
does not mean to be more expensive
. For example, ISRO had developed the space
probe/rover for mars
mission for just $75 million
which was even lesser than movie
'Gravity'.In conclusion, the futuristic and innovative
projects
and outcomes can
definitly
inspire the young adults but the inspiration does not have any connection with highly expensive
project
, so government should invest that money educational schools and keep the
projects
under budget, as it is practically feasible.