IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5.5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5.5
5.5
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The essay presents a clear stance against online education replacing traditional education but lacks sufficient examples and detailed arguments. Grammar and coherence need improvement for better readability and logical flow.
| Overall score | 5.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 15 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 1 | |
| Lexical resource | 4 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5 | |
| Task response | 5 |
Question
The proliferation of online education platforms has changed the landscape of learning, providing access to education across the globe. However, concerns about the quality of learning and the potential obsolescence of traditional classroom settings have been raised.
To what extent do you agree or disagree that online education can replace traditional in-person education?
#Online Education
#Agree / Disagree
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:158
Paragraphs:1
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Thesis Statement
student
will have a higher degree of education
if exposed to a wider variety of the different arrays of online education
is morally concerning. This is because traditional
education
takes the utmost advantage of a
student
in various aspects, such as, in practice-based learning, in face-to-face direct coherence of a certain field of study, and in direct proportional critique and advice when a mistake or misunderstanding is obvious.
Accordingly, the underlining basis of traditional learning is to be "hands on" in terms of the education
that is being presented to the student
. This is such so that the student
can receive the education
in a first-person point of perspective and not have the knowledge come to their mind in utter shambles. On this regard, online education
cannot be seen as
a morally adequate form of education
if its only advantage is to provide a wider and broader breadth of knowledge.