IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5.5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5.5
5.5
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The essay addresses the question but lacks clarity and coherence in its arguments. Grammar and vocabulary usage are adequate but contain errors and inconsistencies that affect readability and overall effectiveness.
| Overall score | 5.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 32 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 15 | |
| Lexical resource | 8 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
The media plays a crucial role in shaping public opinion, and advertising can be a powerful tool in this process.
Do you agree or disagree that the media should use advertising to shape public opinion?
#Media & Advertising
#Agree / Disagree
Submitted Answer
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Words:259
Paragraphs:5
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Thesis Statement
media
has a crucial impact on society
including advertising as a part of daily life. Nowadays
you cannot prommote
you
business without advertising it on social media
, billboards, and so on, but does it have to shape public opinion?I disagree with
opinion
that advertising has to shape the way people
think
relying on picture
or video they see. In some cases, it can have bad
impact on person
's life if the advertisement iclude
promtion
containing information about body size or shape. Mostly, the
media
tend to use the opportunity to sell products through the internet but not everyone can afford following the modern trends, especially if it refers to
people
who might not be able to meet perfect body shape standards due to
chronical
diseases.
On the contrary, there are bonuses of advertising areas related to personal
growth
including courses, jobs and others. People
can benefit from it significantly, attending cultural events and building network. In addition, adverts have been in usage lately promoting diverse language courses. Subsequently, more people
having looked up the information about prices and enrolment conditions are likely to enhance their language skills.Also, in view of
upsides
such prominent factors as religion-oriented areas are worth mentioning. Primarily, it is important to remember how to respect other religions and cultures. Although, the media
literacy is widely spoken about nowadays, yet, there are people
on
media
that tend to neglect this rule of respect towards others.Missing Linking Devices
media
has nowadays
both downsides and upsides are to be considered in advance.