IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the task but lacks depth and clarity in its arguments. Grammar and vocabulary usage are basic, with several errors affecting readability and coherence.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 38 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 15 | |
| Lexical resource | 16 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world.
What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions.
#Youth Crime
#Problem / Solution
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:337
Paragraphs:4
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Thesis Statement
of
youth
crime
has become more often in most cities. There are many
reasons
to stop youth
crime
from increasing
rapidly. Factors
that lead
a young person to commit a crime
could be from depression, taking
drugs
, and poverty. However, for every problem there should be a solution
like:
forcing parents to take
more care on
their kids, and track people that sell illegal drugs
. In this essay, I will be discussing
the reasons
why youth
crime
are
increasing
and suggest some solutions
.Drugs
is
a factor
that lead
youth
crime
to be seen often. The moment where this young person feels dizzy or in another world
he starts to enjoy walking down the street with a knife or a weapon, and can kill someone. The second reason
would be poverty because its
very hard for someone at this age to find food or a place without any money, so he would start stealing jewellery
’s, money, and much more. Depression is the last reason
being discussed
in this essay. The careless family that doesn't
show any effort in raising their child in a way that makes them happy is a factor
that leads
many
to be depressed
then starts to get himself in trouble. All of those reasons
discussed
are factors
that lead
a youth
person or group to commit a crime
.Tracking people that sell illegal
drugs
can be a good
solution
to prevent many
youth
crime
. In addition, increasing
the number of policemen in the area would decrease the number of drug
dealers. Secondly, forcing families to pay more effort in
taking
care of their children to ensure that he would not be included in crimes
that could ruin his
life. those
solution
should be implemented in the future to decrease the rate of crimes
.In conclusion, depression,
taking
drugs
,and poverty are all factors
that lead
youth
crime
to be
increasing
rapidly. Although
I did discuss
the solutions
that should be addressed to ensure the safety of many
youth
people.