IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 5.5
IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5.5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5.5
5.5
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The essay presents a balanced view on the importance of family support and self-motivation, but lacks depth in argumentation and coherence. Grammatical errors and limited vocabulary usage affect clarity, while the structure could be improved for better logical flow.
| Overall score | 5.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 40 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 11 | |
| Lexical resource | 18 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 7 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Family support is often seen as crucial for educational success, but self-motivation is also a key factor.
To what extent do you agree or disagree that family support is more important than self-motivation for success in education?
#Family
#Agree / Disagree
Submitted Answer
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Words:348
Paragraphs:3
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Thesis Statement
important
key to achieve
success in education is the support
from the family
. But it is equally necessary to remain motivated throughout the time until we achieve
our goal
. Having support
from family
and being self motivated
are like two hands of a human body
without which we can not
do our work. I do not argue with the notion that
family
support
is not
important
to be successful
but
I strongly believe that self
motivation
is equally
important
, hence
I do not agree with the claim that having
support
from
family
is more
important
than self
motivation
in education.
Education is
the one of
the key
to live
a happy and successful life
. Success come from hardships, if we stay
focused in achieving
our goal
will eventually lead to make our parents support us for our future. Taking our prime minister ' Shri Narendra Modi
'
as
prime
example, whose story gives us enough
motivation
and learnings that no matter how much we have to struggle but if we
hardwork
and
stay
dedicated towards our
goal
, nothing can stop us from
achieving
it.
Mr. Modi started as a tea vendor and thrughout
his life
journey he had only one goal
to make this country a better place in terms of development infrastructure. His beliefs towards life
are so inspiring
which tells us to not stop until you succeed. In the same pattern, if we have struggles in our
lives
, and in many situations when our
family
is not in favour of our decisions towards our
goal
, it is
important
to
stay
focused and motivated to make them believe how much success and your achievement means to you and how much necessary it is for you to have their
support
.
In conclusion, I would like to state that neither
family
support
or
motivation
are superior to eachother
rather both are equally supreme for an individual to succeed in life
. If we are motivated enough to climb the ladder and stay
commited
towards our goals
, achievement is just not far away, it will walk down to us as a success.