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The essay addresses the question but lacks clarity and coherence, with frequent grammatical errors and limited vocabulary. Improved structure and more varied language would enhance the response, along with clearer development of ideas and examples.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 25 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 7 | |
| Lexical resource | 9 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Writing Task
#Family
#Problem / Solution
The struggle to maintain a healthy work-life balance can significantly affect family time, often leading to strained relationships.
What are the main reasons for poor work-life balance affecting family life, and what strategies could be implemented to improve family time?
Submitted Answer
Words336|Paragraphs4
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Paragraph 1 Issues:
Thesis Statement
maintain
a good balance between work
and life can greatly have effect
on family
time, which normally leads to unstable relationships between the dad and his family
. As a result of too much time at work
, it can make most of his home's responsibilities on his wife alone and other capable staff wont
overtake his extra work
shift.Fathers play a role in their kids' raising and growth, which without him, the wife would struggle in all of their raising capabilities and also simultaneously taking care of the house daily basis with no rest.
This would cause her to burn out and feel depressed, in sync to the point of that the
family
would feel that only the mom is present for her kids to listen to them and be around them while the dad
isnt
practically there to do the same, this might make the mom act like the famous term given "A single mom" which causes an imbalance to her
family
unfortunately
.
That's
what would happen if he had alot
of work
time.As a result, if
he's
seen working with no rest, other suitable staff for his position would be likely to cooperate with him in terms of shifts. Luckily, there are strategies that would be applied in the company he works at so that he can have a greater chance of being with his wife and children. First of all, the company needs to train more number of staff who might have similar job tasks to him
, so that
he can focus and do his best at few tasks assigned to him only, that way he can be productive and others too.
Secondly, taking breaks between tasks can be very efficient in his performance
since it has proven to be a really effective technique.Lastly, the father is the base of his
family
, the more he is well and happy, the more his family
is a successful one. Hopefully
workplaces would start applying these techniques soon.