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Writing Task

#Urbanization

#Problem / Solution

Urban development often results in the loss of green spaces.

What are the consequences of losing green spaces in urban areas, and what strategies can be employed to preserve and increase greenery in cities?

Submitted Answer

Words300|Paragraphs3

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Thesis Statement

The green

spaces

in the

city

play important roles for the example are producing

oxygent

and

to control

the air pollution level.

Unfortunatelly

, the increasing of population which is driven by the urbanization

require

larger housing

area

. If this issue

are

not controlled properly, it will disturb the environment stability. To solve this matter,

believe the existence of the

city

governance regulation that emphasizing on the minimum percentage of green

space

is needed.

The

city

parks are crucial element in urban area due to the trees are absorbing C02 from vehicles and processing the C02 to 02 through the

photosyntesis

. In this

proces

, the trees are releasing the

oxygent

that need

human being. If the

city

jungle

spaces

are decreasing means

there

are limited

intruments

to process and produce the

oxygent

and increasing the contamination. For

instans

, in

Jakarta

as the

maghnet

of economy and business hub, many people from the

sub urban

commute every day to Jakarta for working. With the high traffic condition, Jakarta

rise

as the third most polluted

city

in the world. In addition, the number of greenery area also minimum as the consequences of the increasing of housing demand. To mitigate this issue, the Jakarta

goverment

issue

local

regulation

about the compulsory of minimum greenery in each district. This

is has

a purposes

to maintain and improve the air quality and to minimize the

polution

. By this regulation, the number of the parks can be

preserve

and increasing easily because

every households

are mandatorily to create a green

space

in their

neighbourhoods

In sum, in order to guarantee the quality and the supply of

oxygent

the balance

ammount

of trees and

city

parks need to be regulated by the government as the

higest

authority to ensure the quality of health and environment sustainability.

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Total Errors	46
Grammatical range and accuracy	15
Lexical resource	21
Coherence & cohesion	6
Task response	4