IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the question but lacks depth and clarity in its arguments. Grammar and vocabulary usage are basic, and coherence and cohesion need improvement for better readability.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 26 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4 | |
| Lexical resource | 13 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Universal healthcare systems aim to provide healthcare access to all citizens regardless of their financial status, ensuring that everyone receives basic health services.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of implementing a universal healthcare system?
#Health
#Advantage / Disadvantage
Submitted Answer
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Words:266
Paragraphs:4
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Thesis Statement
always
try to find a way out of every single problem in their country, and one of the common issues is basic
healthcare
. Healthcare programs
initiate a whole population coverage without concern for their economic stage. This program
was built to give
basic
healthcare
to the citizens. There are several advantages and drawbacks to every government program
, and this program
was included.Universal
healthcare
programs
are intended to touch every layer of the people
without giving
different services
to wealthy people
even if they can afford them. It will make the rich people
feel uncomfortable and disappointed because
they think they deserve better than the poor. For instance, when they give
birth, it becomes a very special
moment for every couple. Of course, when they have financial support, they will choose the best services
that they can not
take if universal healthcare
were applied.On the other hand, it may seem like
giving
an advantage to the needy people
because
they can get the basic
health service
they need
without any added financial issues. For example, when the penniless need
to use contraception, they only need
to go to the health facilities nearby and get their healthcare
without any concern for the lack of money.in conclusion,
basic
healthcare
is right for every human in this world. However, when we talk about
standard services
, it will be complicated,
because
society has its own standard classes. That is why I assumed that basic
healthcare
need
to consider services
type to give
people
a chance to choose what kind of services
they want to get.