IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the topic but lacks clear structure and coherence. Grammar and vocabulary usage are basic with several errors, and the task response is not fully developed or supported with examples.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 25 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4 | |
| Lexical resource | 14 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
As the world becomes increasingly globalized, many communities are experiencing a loss of cultural identity, which can be seen in the diminishing use of native languages and traditions.
What problems arise from cultural erosion and what can be done to prevent it?
#Culture
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Words:256
Paragraphs:4
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Thesis Statement
language
aspect being significantly influenced by globalization it might be misinterpreted as a decline in usage of native language
. Both native and second languages
can be involved in the person`s
life. On the contrary, the salient feature of the time we live in is to know as many languages
as possible. It doesn
`t involve the process of forgetting your own traditions
or languages
. Furthemore
, leraning
new traditions
involves teaching people
from other contries
your own traditions
, especially now when you have an opportunity to travel the world.Other areas that benefit from globalization are diversity of cultures, food market, and others. At a second glance, the diversity of cultures responds
for
enhanced collaboration between countries. No matter how many languages
or cultures
person can contribute the knowledges obtained from this activity.Taking into consideration the possibility of loss of cultural identity cannot be overseen. There are some
people
who tend to show their cultural traditions
to others
meanwhile there are people
who tend to follow learn and follow the traditions
from the countries they live in. Anyway, as long people
support a connectionn
with their family they are not dsupposed
to be ignorant of their inheritance. Nowadays, it is important to be aware of
how wordls
changes around you and how you can adjust to modern tendencies.All in all, globalization has downsides but upsides are explicit to surpass relying on the factors stated above.