IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6
IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
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The essay addresses the question but lacks depth in analysis and examples. Grammar and vocabulary are adequate but contain errors and lack variety. Coherence and cohesion are present but could be improved with better transitions and more detailed explanations.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 14 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 3 | |
| Lexical resource | 3 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Despite a variety of sport facilities and gyms, people are less fit nowadays than ever before.
What do you think are the main causes of this problem? What solutions can you suggest?
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The fitness industry has grown extensively in the past decade, but the majority of people are still unfit
and
lack physical strength compared to the past. A busy lifestyle and consumption of fast food
are the two primary reasons for this issue. To address this problem, people need to maintain a balanced lifestyle and prepare their food
at home. This essay will further elaborate on the root causes of the prevailing issue and propose possible solutions.To begin with, the working-class people have busy work schedules and thus less time to prepare
food
at home, leaving no time for fitness and increasing their intake of restaurant meals. Nowadays, individuals spend around 8 to 12 hours at their offices and workplaces, and as a result, leaving them with no energy to engage in exercises or weight training at gyms. In additions
to this, the fast-paced life has forced many individuals to rely on junk meals or restaurants due to lack of time for cooking for themselves. Therefore, individuals are consuming significantly more processed food
and are engaging less with physical actitivities
compared to the past.To conclude, I think that population in general less fit due to stress at work and inflation.