IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the question but lacks clarity and coherence in some parts. Grammar and vocabulary usage are adequate but need improvement in accuracy and variety.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 44 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 18 | |
| Lexical resource | 15 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 7 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
International trade offers vast opportunities for businesses but also presents significant challenges, especially due to complex and varied trade regulations across different countries.
What challenges do businesses face due to international trade regulations and how can they effectively navigate these challenges?
#Business & Money
#Problem / Solution
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:313
Paragraphs:9
Task Response
Readability
Coherence
Cohesion
Vocabulary Usage
Grammar Range
Ideas Development
Logical Flow
Missing Linking Devices
Thesis Statement
international
trade
have ushered significant damage to the businesses
.From significant numbers charged in importation and exportation in tax and gigantic number of restricted imports to supply chain disruptions and political and economic
instability
international
trade
has posed
various threats to businesses
. While these international
trade
regulations impose
severe threat to businesses
it also given
rise to the benefits enjoyed by the businesses
.One of the most pressing issues is the detrimental impact of
international
trade
on importataion
and exportation taxes. The insane numbers charged on goods
imported contribute to the erosion of profits yield
by local businesses
. This discourages international
trade
between countries
since businesses
are make
little to no profits.Additionally, rules on
goods
that are restricted make it impossible for countries
to share their riches. For instance
some contries
that has
legalized weed cannot trade with weed prohibited countries
, therefore
no trade
relations exist among them. This could lead to a significant damage
to the national GDP.Missing Linking Devices
poses
challenges to the local businesses
significantilly
.Missing Linking Devices
sunctions
imposed
on other countries
to make impossible for them to trade effectively.Missing Linking Devices
unstable
economy in these targeted countries
, posing
a major loss in productivity
causing inflation and food shortage.To mitigate these challenges, a concerted effort is required to foster more
practiable
international
trade
regulations that are favourable to majority of
the businesses
. For instance
loosening the rules on restricted goods
or minimising tax rates to reasonable
percentage that yeild
a positive percentage in profits.In conclusion, while
international
trade
regulations poses
immense damage to businesses
, it is essential to recognise and address the benefits associated with it. By imposing
goods
restriction policies it
is paramount to the ecosystem security of contries
to ensure no harm is imposed
to the flora and fauna of a country
.