IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the question but lacks depth and clarity in its arguments. Grammar and vocabulary usage are basic, and the essay could benefit from better coherence and cohesion to improve readability and logical flow.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 14 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 1 | |
| Lexical resource | 3 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5 | |
| Task response | 5 |
Question
Family involvement in education can be a powerful motivator and provide essential support, but it can also lead to undue pressure and stress on children.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of family involvement in children's education.
#Family
#Advantage / Disadvantage
Submitted Answer
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Words:154
Paragraphs:2
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Thesis Statement
children
who have a hard time learning by themselves and are in need of someone's help. For example, children
with special needs tend to need their family involvement to inspire and encourage them to learn. Their help and encouragement can help them slowly learn and improve themselves.But on the other side, family involvement can also lead to undue pressure and stress on
children
because of the expectations that they hold on their children
. Not to mention how
children
are already under a pressure when it comes to studying, which is why sometimes they need a moment for themselves and do what they think is the best for them, even if sometimes that is not enough for us but enough for them.