IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6
IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
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| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
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Question
In recent years, the rise of digital technology has seen a significant increase in the popularity of online education, contrasting sharply with the traditional classroom-based learning environments.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of traditional and online educational systems. Which do you think is more effective?
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Thesis Statement
learning
is gaining its popularity in today's world, it is argued that it is not as effective as conventional classroom
teaching
and learning
. In this article, I would discuss the advantages and disadvantages of these two educational methods and provide
my perspective on which one of them is more beneficial to students
' learning
.Online
educational systems
and platforms
, which are normally based on the internet and computer, provide
a space for students
to access different knowledge resources and learn
flexibly. For example, Duolinguo, a renowned language learning
platform
, enables its users to learn
any kind of language they have interest in. Since you can install the application into your mobile phone, you can carry it everywhere and learn
language under various situations. However
, despite these advantages, online
learning
platforms
may not be effective in enhancing students
' learning
efficiency and
it may reduce their levels of concentration while learning
.As it is discussed in the previous paragraph,
students
are provided
with tons of knowledge and various learning
resources while using online
learning
platforms
. However
, the abundancy
of learning
resources may make them feel it is hard
to choose what to learn
, which may waste their learning
time. Additionally, Some online
learning
systems
have integrated too much interesting content into their platform
and students
' learning
process, which may distract students
from the content they need to learn
.Compared to
online
learning
system
, traditional classroom
teaching
provides
a more professional and concentrated learning
atmosphere for students
to acquire knowledge. Professional guidance would be provided
in the classroom
setting by teachers. Furthermore, since the teacher would monitor students
' learning
development, it is unlikely for them to get distracted while learning
. However
, some students
may complain it is boring to learn
in a classroom
and the classroom
content may be outdated.In conclusion, Online
learning
platforms
and traditional classroom
teaching
all have their own advantages and drawbacks. Learners should choose the teaching
methodology that is suitable for their learning
needs and
they can integrate these two learning
systems
when necessary.