IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6
IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
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The essay addresses the question and provides a balanced view of the advantages and disadvantages of technology. However, there are grammatical errors, and the coherence and cohesion could be improved with better transitions and more structured arguments.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 33 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 16 | |
| Lexical resource | 9 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 5 |
Question
A lot of people have become dependent on technology as it plays a big role in our daily lives.
Do you agree that living in the computer age has more advantages than disadvantages? Describe the positive and negative impacts of technology on our lives and give your opinion.
#Technology
#Advantage / Disadvantage
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Thesis Statement
people`s
lives
. For some people, they believe that living in the computer
has more benefits rather than unfavourable effects. In this
essay
I will discuss
why I agree that computers
can help people in so many ways and also
its potential challenges.Computer
plays an integral role by making our lives
easier. Through this, we can save time at our own convenience. For example, If a student is doing some research, he can easily look for information
in the internet
by clicking the web without needing to go to the library to look for books
. Or, finding a job can be very frustrating, by submitting job applications online, we can easily find suitable work that is best for us. Clearly, online informations
in
the computer
is
the key advantage to make
our lives
flexible.However,
computer
has
also
its
disadvantages. One major concern is the potential of lack of communication. For instance, some children who play games in
the computer
may encounter less
interactions with the same age group. As a result of this, they may have problems in
their social emotional skills in the future. Or, people who are always on the screen, may prefer to attend events through virtual rather than physical. Therefore, this can lead to negative effect in later life
.In conclusion, while
computers
may provide us an easy access
to information, it also
present
challenges, including reduced quality interaction. Personally, I prefer owning a computer
so that I can live a more efficient lifestyle but
it is also
essential to balance online and offline so that I can maintain meaningful connections and develop social skills.