IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6
IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
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The essay addresses the question but lacks depth in argumentation and examples. Grammar and vocabulary are adequate but could be improved for better clarity and coherence.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 28 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 8 | |
| Lexical resource | 12 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
The potential for extracting valuable resources from other planets is an exciting prospect that could address resource scarcity on Earth. However, this raises ethical questions about the exploitation of other celestial bodies.
Do you agree or disagree that extracting resources from other planets is an ethical practice?
#Space Exploration
#Agree / Disagree
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planets
in it have been in existence long before the human race began. The Earth, which human being occupy, can no longer sustain us. It is advisable that we look for
other
sources
to preserve our lives. Some people think that the capacity to utilize other
valuable resources from other
planet
is one way to solve the issue of scarcity on Earth. But, this act questions our ethics about exploiting other
celestial bodies. I Strongly opine that we explore
other
sources and make use of them. In this essay, I would clearly discuss my view on this topic.According to religious stories, God created the
world
and everything in it, and He gave man dominion over everything He created. We should have no doubts or morally feel wrong, because
God made everything for us and asked that we take control of it. Unfortunately, it is quite sad
scientist
do not accept this believe
, and they are still skeptical
about what to do. Many science people do not believe in the creation story, rather they think the world
was formed from "the big bang theory
". As a God believer
we cannot impose belief or religion on anyone, but we should remember that the planet
we live in
cannot fend for our needs anymore
. It is high time we left already.Also , I think that exploiting
other
planets
would enable us to explore
more parts of the world
. The world
is still a mystery; It still has many places unexplored. It should not be considered unethical to explore
the world
and make new discoveries that could benefit mankind. There is a probability that most of the cure
to the ailments, we battle with here, might be in
other
planets
. I believe that going outside the Earth is one step to uncovering numerous mysteries.In conclusion, I highly agree that we
explore
and exploit other
celestial bodies. This would be of great advantage to mankind.