IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6
IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
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The essay addresses the question but lacks depth in analysis and examples. Grammar and vocabulary are adequate but could be more varied and precise.
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| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
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Question
Advancements in technology have transformed various aspects of sports, from performance analysis to equipment design.
How has technology influenced sports, and does it affect the fairness of competitions?
#Sport
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Thesis Statement
Technology
has become substantial in the recent years
. Technology
has changed the perspective not only
in the field of sports but in major fields in real life. Technology
in sports has enhanced performance analysis to a major extent. Technology
has brought advancements not only
in equipment design but has revolutionized the way sports are being looked.Missing Linking Devices
Technology
has influenced sports to a huge amount. Performance analysis in sports has become more convenient and effortless with the involvement of technology
. In recent years
a number of fitness
checker apps have been introduced to keep an eye on the fitness and well-being of sports persons
.Fairness in competitions has increased with the involvement of
technology
in sports. 3D cameras have helped
in finding out the authenticity of the umpire's decision
as well as providing more details regarding the decision. Technology
has helped
in score predictions depending on the probabilities of scores. It has helped
in scheduling the matches depending on the probability of rainfall or sunny weather. Match fixing and other criminal activities within the sports have been reduced to a huge amount within last years because of eagle eye view of cameras inspecting each sports person fairness during the match.In a nutshell, Technology has become an essential need in the modern world.
Not only
in fields of sports but also in banking, tourism etcetera. Technology
has brought advancements in sports and helped
in better performance analysis and fairness in competitions.