IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5.5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5.5
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The essay addresses the question but lacks depth in analysis and examples. Grammar and vocabulary are adequate but contain errors and could be more varied.
| Overall score | 5.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 33 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6 | |
| Lexical resource | 19 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Technology has revolutionized how we communicate, affecting even the dynamics within families.
What has been the impact of technology on communication within families?
#Family
#Direct Question
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Technology
, as we know it, is rapidly evolving and has made a tremendous impact in peoples
lives. For instance, in
communication
.
Its
no surprise communication
would be affected
, as communication
has always played a huge part in history and daily lives. Furthermore, the rapid evolution of technology
has also affected
dynamics of different
people
with their families
, but specifically, what is the impact of this revolution?To start, we have to
talk
about
the first ever revolutionary piece of technology
that truly affected
communication
with families
: the telephone; a device that lets people
communicate
long
distances with their most loved ones. The kickstarter of it all, it introduced a new way
for people
to talk
to one another with their voices, opposed to sending letters with carrier pigeons. As a result, more and more people
started talking
with
their families
and friends way more often, as the communication
was no longer halted by long
wait times for messages. Consequently
as time progresses, a new revolution for communication
was due.Smartphones were introduced much later on, and even
till
this day, it becomes
the most prominent way
of communicating. A handheld device that fits into any pocket, able to communicate
with anyone around the globe, it's
no wonder it became
as big as it is today. To say that it massively revolutionized the communication
industry is an understatement, the phone allowed people
to communicate
to
one another with many different
ways
of communication
, for example video calls
and emails. Hence, people
no longer had issues or problems if they wanted to speak with their families
, despite the long
distances or different
timezones that used to be problems. Furthermore, family
gatherings also became
much more lively, as families
can now call any of their other relatives via video calls
or normal calls
and experience them together, even if they were seperated
.In conclusion,
technology
has revolutionized the industry, some may be good, some may be bad. Despite that, communication
has taken a turn for the better, and I think most families
around the world would agree with me.