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IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
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The essay addresses the task but lacks depth in argumentation and examples. Grammar and vocabulary are adequate but could be more varied and accurate. Coherence and cohesion are present but could be improved with better transitions and structure.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 25 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4 | |
| Lexical resource | 14 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Some people believe that what children watch on television influences their behaviour. Others say that the amount of time spent watching television influences their behaviour.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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#Discussion
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Thesis Statement
watching
television
can cause a negative impact
for their kids
, while other people believe that educational
purposes for their kids
is from watching
television
as a positive source. In my opinion, it depends on what type of
programs
that they present for their kids
to learn
from watching
TV. From those statements, it will be discussed as an agreement on
this essay.My first opinion,
watching
television
is not a problem for kids
, unless several programs
from the television
will give
a good impact
for their educational
purposes. For instance, their parents give
plenty of time for their kids
to watch
and learn
about the alphabet from the television
program
. Somehow, several children use their visual sense to understand that, so it is easier as a fast learner to learn
from the television
and give
a positive impact
for their educational
purposes. However, television
can give
a chance to disabled children with eye problems to learn
by hearing the sound from television
.Another opinion,
television
can give
more information
about this world. National geographic
as an example for this statement. This program
includes all the species and wildlife or nature, which is proper to create meaningful information
. Rather than having to go there to see the species, we can use the television
to get to know more. All the programs
that are served on television
mostly are important and will give
the audience entertaining and impactful information
especially for kids
with lots of questions in their lives.Watching
television
for their kids
is not giving
them a bad impact
, as long as their parents can control what type of television
program
for their kids
. It is better to give
them an educational
program
than a cartoon program
, maybe it does not give
them insight about learning
. Several programs
such as national geographic
can also help children to understand and get the information
about wildlife and nature in this world.