IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 6
IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
6.0
Overall Score
08 Nov 24, 17:00
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The essay presents a clear opinion but contains several grammatical errors and lacks a strong thesis statement. Coherence and cohesion are adequate, but the development of ideas could be more logical and supported with examples.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 36 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 12 | |
| Lexical resource | 17 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Fast food is often criticized for its negative health impacts, including contributing to obesity and other health issues. However, it remains a popular choice due to its convenience and affordability.
Do you agree or disagree that the convenience of fast food outweighs its health risks?
#Food
#Agree / Disagree
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:352
Paragraphs:4
Task Response
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Cohesion
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Thesis Statement
fast
food
is considered as the cause of many health issues, while it is still favourable because of its convenience and affordabily
. This essay is about my disagreement of outbalancing of the availablity
and cost
-effectiveness of junk food
over its possible health risks.On the one hand, accessibility and inexpensiveness are the main aspects of
fast
food
industry. Eventhough
junk food
was created a long time
ago, its cost
and time
for cooking have dramatically decreased over time
which got attention of nearly everyone. Also
its taste has considerably altered
which has increased its popularity. That lead to creation
of some of the most iconic restourants
in history, such as Mcdonald's and KFC. These restaurants have had a great impact on cost
, methods and preparation time
of fast
food
. These facilities have offered people to buy inexpensive dish
which can be done in a matter of minutes. Nowadays, most people do not want to spend
their time
cooking food
for themselves. Instead
they go to fast
food
restaurants and buy meal
there which is
cooked fast and at a low cost
. For example, a person could spend an hour cooking meal
or could spend ten minutes waiting for the meal to be cooked. Obviously, the person will choose second
option because of its accessibility and low price.On the other hand,
side affects
of fast
food
are more than planty
. Some of these afffects
are being overweight, heart-related problems, cardiovascular diseases and many more. The most widespread one of these is being overweight. Doctors all over the world recommend eating less unhealthy food
and doing any kind of sport. However, not all deseases
can be cured in this way. For this reason, everyone should be aware of health-related issues to prevent them from happenning
. For instance, a plump individual could have avoided being overweight, if the individual was
familiar with negative side of fast
food
.In conclusion,
despite of
the fact that fast
food
is well-priced and convinient
, everyone should be conscious of disadvantages of junk food
as well as eating it less.