IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 6
IELTS Essay Sample Band 6
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The essay addresses the question but lacks depth in argumentation and examples. Grammar and vocabulary are adequate but contain errors and limited range. Coherence and cohesion are present but could be improved for better readability.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 21 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4 | |
| Lexical resource | 10 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
While some people consider global warming to be the most pressing environmental problem which we have at the moment, others believe that deforestation has a more devastating impact on our world.
Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
#Environment
#Discussion
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Thesis Statement
global
warming
is the most proliferating environmental issue that we have at hand, While others think that deforestration
has a greater negative impact on our society. Global
warming
is rapidly increasing daily; the temperature of the Earth is declining tremendously. Even, felling of trees
is a prominent issue as well which must be faced to prevent further crisis. I opine that deforestation
is a more crucial problem.I firmly believe that
deforestation
is a matter of great deal, because
it the
major reason for global
warming
. Trees
are of great economic importance to the environment. They take in the Carbondioxide that humans release, and evolve oxygen for other living things to respirate with. However, the continous
cutting of trees
for artificial purposes has led to more production of carbon(IV)oxide gas in the atmosphere. This gas is solely responsible for the depletion of the ozone layer
which protects us from the scorching rays of the sun that causes global
warming
. Therefore, deforestation
should be tackled initially before global
warming
.Global
warming
has brought a huge dilemma to all biological beings. Many animals are dying due to its effect; especially the animals in antartica
who are accustomed to low temperatures. It is also the significant cause of skin cancer; a disease that is usually affects the Mammals. Fortunately, Scientists are optimistic about finding a cure to the ailment. They also mentioned that the effective method to reduce global
warming
is by planting of trees
. Afforestation would make the environment more habitable and pollution-free.In conclusion,
global
warming
will not be reduced without solving the issue of deforestation
. Cutting of trees
is the root contributor to the rising temperature
all over the world. We should prioritize deforestation
first.