IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the question but lacks depth and clarity in its arguments. Grammar and vocabulary usage need improvement, and the essay should be more cohesive and coherent to achieve a higher band score.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 33 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 13 | |
| Lexical resource | 12 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are turning towards fast food for their main meals.
Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
#Food
#Advantage / Disadvantage
Submitted Answer
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Thesis Statement
modernize
day by day
everyone is relying on others. They are becoming lazy and not being able to do their work by themselves. Even they cann't
make
their own food
and consume
the readymade
food
and fast
food
.Missing Linking Devices
Consuming
fast
food
can save the time to make
food
in the kitchen
which makes
people
to utilize their time in their important works . Problems like cleaning utensils, kitchen can be reduced . It is not necessery
to go to the food
stores to buy food
materials. These are some merits of having fast
food
but
more than merits it has many demerits.Fast
food
are
made
with high calories, fats etc
which are unhealthy for the body. Most of the fast
foods
are in the packet form
so it is unpredictable that which materials are used to prepare it and how long it can last. Eating fast
foods
regularly can cause the huge health problem specially to old age people
, childern
and pregnant women. Also
it is harmful to other people
as well. Nowadays, in most of the developed contries
, people
having are consuming
fast
food
as their main meal due to this they are being affected by dangerious
diseases.In conclusion, having
fast
food
can be helpful to the people
in some ways but
it has many disadvantages
so the habit of consuming
fast
food
should be reduced to live a healthy life. Government
of every country should make
the policy not to consume
excess fast
food
.