IELTS Essay Checker - Sample Band 5
IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5 | IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the relationship between education and youth crime but lacks depth in analysis and examples. Improvements in grammar accuracy and coherence are needed for a higher score.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 24 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 7 | |
| Lexical resource | 10 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
Education plays a critical role in shaping the future of young individuals and potentially their inclination towards criminal behavior.
Discuss the relationship between educational opportunities and youth crime, and suggest how improving education could reduce such crimes.
#Youth Crime
#Discussion
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Thesis Statement
To these youngsters,
school
is probably their number one source of learning, it is where they learn new things and socialize with all kinds of people. With school
, therse
young people are exposed to countless possibilities and oportunities
. However, the lack of proper teaching and disciplinary actions may lead them to be a criminal.School
provides a lot of perks within them, not only that it teaches you several lesson
that might help students
find their passion and life purpose, but it also educate
you on how to be a good person. One of the advantages that a student
gets is a chance to go abroad or the student
exchange programs, there a so many activities that can sharpen their soft and hard skills such as, olympics
, games, extracurricular and many more.It is
very important
for educational institutions to take account student
's well being
and monitor their behavior
closely. There has
been so many reports on cases of criminality that surround these young individuals, for instance, bullying, killing, theft, and even uses of substance. School
plays an important role to teach
their students
how to act as a responsible citizen and how to act accordingly. Socializations about crime should be pushed upon the children as they grow up
since those developmental stages are when they really start to understand the world and shape their moral compass. They should be surrounded by positivity, love, and kindness.