IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 5
IELTS Essay Sample Band 5
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The essay addresses the task but contains numerous grammatical errors and lacks coherence in some parts. Vocabulary is adequate but could be more varied, and the ideas need better development and support.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 30 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 12 | |
| Lexical resource | 9 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5 | |
| Task response | 4 |
Question
There is often a mismatch between the skills taught in educational institutions and those required in the job market, leaving many graduates unprepared for professional work.
What problems does this skills mismatch create and how can educational programs be adjusted to better meet the needs of the job market?
#Education
#Problem / Solution
Submitted Answer
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Words:265
Paragraphs:4
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Thesis Statement
skills
they learned in educational institutions and those are required in the job demand. This tragedy so pity, caused many
graduates are wasting their time for studying unrelevant
skills
.There are some aftermaths caused by this tragedy. Firstly and also the main problem is about the unemployment rate. When this happens, nation's economic will not
going
well because
it will lowering
goods demand because
many
people have no money to afford. At
the end, this will impact to
nation's health and education rate as many
folks cannot pay for their needs. The next problem is decreasing foreign's investment. Overseas investor
will not interested
to put their invesment
because
they will be difficult to find high quality
employees that they need. Foreign investments are important to a country for developing their infrastructures and public services.If this actually occurs, the government must take a part of it, especially the minister of education. The old strategies which are
unrelevant
with
today's world must be omit
and replace
with the new one. For example, many
students are forced to study all of the subjects and skills
which not all of those are suitable for student's ambition. To solve this, the government can replace it with workshops or bootcamps
to boost juvenile's ability. Students can choose their wanted skills
at the end of high school period.In conclusion,
many
impacts that country will face, like lowering goods demand until decreasing foreign investors interest. The government can change it with adding some workshops and bootcamps
.